Journal #8
Question-For the immigrants of the early 1900's, what was the most difficult part of arriving at Ellis Island? Argue your claim/perspective on this issue!
Answer- There is an important question about immigration which is " what was the most difficult part of arriving at Ellis Island?" My perspective of the most difficult part of arriving at Ellis Island is the legal inspection. The legal inspection consists of 29 questions for every passenger. There was a manifest. The manifest, as this list was called, had the name and a description of each passenger. An immigrant could be detained for further inquiry if his or her answers differed from the answers listed on the manifest.Furthermore, my perspective of the most difficult part of arriving at Ellis Island is the legal inspection.
Argument - 2.5
ReplyDeleteEvidence - 3
Transitions - 2
Formal Style - 2
Conclusion - 2.5
12/20 (75) - Kimora, I like that you used some document evidence form the research about Ellis Island. I would like for you to have used more transitional words and wrote in greater detail to receive more points. "Furthermore" is used when you are adding on another example or detail. "Therefore," is a better conclusion transition to use.