Journal #5
Question-Were workers treated
fairly during Industrialization?
Answer-
There has been arguments formed around an important question “were workers
treated fairly during Industrialization?” Some arguments are that workers were
treated with care and were happy. Another argument was that workers were
treated unfairly, got hurt and weren’t happy with their life. My argument is
that workers weren't treated fairly during Industrialization. During Industrialization
people would have to do labor work. People had to work in factories and at
mills. There working condition were very unfair. In the factory, people will
have to do over time because they didn’t finish their work by a certain time.
Other people hands and feet would be bleeding, broken or tired. Treatment for
worker during Industrialization was very unfair. Furthermore, my argument is
that workers weren’t treated fairly during Industrialization.
Argument: 3
ReplyDeleteEvidence: 2
Transitions: 2
Formal Style: 2
Conclusion: 3
12/20 (75) - Kimora, I like that you included various perspectives in your opening and would like for you to introduce the general topic some more in the beginning. Your evidence, though it comes from the documents, needs to be clearly connected to the document and connected to the argument. You can write more of your own words to explain the connection between the evidence and the argument.